Transformaion DLO

Quick Write - Abandoned Places

Abandoned Places - writing

Our learning goals are to:

-write a description, using powerful words and phrases

-include some Te Reo Māori

-carefully check that our sentences make sense and have correct punctuation and spelling.

The Creepy Castle 

I'm on a secret mission off to go into an abandoned
castle. I went into the castle and  it was creepy .

 The ponio was playing and the fire was still going but
it was cold. But then I heard footsteps. I looked
behind me, there was a shadow and it looked like a
person. The shadow jumped from wall to wall. I was
scared so I tried to hide. There was a person and
she was hiding from the shadow. 

I think the castle was made thousands of years ago. Then there was a BIG ThUMP. I opened the door and got out. I skated across the floor  and went up the stairs. I peeked around the corner. Then I found a knife which was (whero red). The knife was ancient . It looked like it was expensive.  All of a sudden slimy, gooey, toxic slime fell from the ceiling. The walls were black. There was kiore (rats) everywhere. It was disgusting.

Suddenly an alien emerged out of the slime on the wall and he had a laser gun . I dashed out and the alien followed me. There was a wall. It was made out of concrete. Some was falling off and then the alien found me...